Syani
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Post by Syani on Nov 2, 2007 6:49:22 GMT -7
Warning!!! This is kinda rough and I'm really out of practice so let's see how it goes. When I Sleep! You speak in riddles, of secrets never told... Of mysteries big and little, of things I wish I've known. There's no life left in you, yet truth is also not there; Trying to deceive me with that blank-eyed stare. I call you in my head, I call you in my dreams... I call you when I wake, I call you when I sleep My nightmares are filled with voices in the night, Yet you're no longer there to bring back the light. You've managed to forget that I'm the one you need... I made myself forget that you're not there when I sleep.
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Ciggy
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Chaos, panic, pandemonium - my work here is done
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Post by Ciggy on Nov 2, 2007 7:44:17 GMT -7
I liked it Syani, nice job
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Elinea
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Wizard's Code FTW
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Post by Elinea on Nov 2, 2007 9:02:57 GMT -7
beautiful -- a poet , someting I tried and then felt I wasn't any good and gave up ---- but you are way better than I ever, ever was whatcha mean "rusty"??
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Azjin
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Post by Azjin on Nov 2, 2007 9:08:04 GMT -7
Nice job Sy!
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Rykshi
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Post by Rykshi on Nov 2, 2007 9:08:17 GMT -7
I am really happy to see people posting their stories and poems here. I am a huge lover of literature and read voraciously - at least an hour a night, before I go to sleep, usually more. That has been my ritual since I was very young. I am impressed with all the works I have read so far - please keep going!
Poetry is one of my particular favorites. I never cared for it when I was younger, but one day I happened to pick up a book of poetry and read the first poem that I saw. I cried the entire time because it resonated so strongly with me, and finally realized the power that poetry had to evoke strong feelings. I have been hooked ever since.
I really like this poem, Syani - it is full of yearning and sadness, and I think you have done a good job capturing that. Thank you for sharing it!
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Hetae
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Post by Hetae on Nov 16, 2007 5:18:06 GMT -7
Very good IMO...I am no where near a poet but do enjoy reading them when I come across one.
I look forward to more from you!
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